This board pointed out my broad scope by introducing another character. Also, when this board was shown to other people, half of them got the monkey poop joke while the other half did not.
Additionally, there's not motivation for the monkey to feel remorse and (what seems to be) returning the peach tree. So back to the drawing board for clarity and more bang for my buck.
Second Storyboard:
In this one, this become more about the Peach Tree than the Monkey King's story. While the audience I showed this board to were entertained, when the overall reaction was "Awww..." at the end, that was not my goal. So back to the drawing board.
Third Storyboard:
Now we're getting somewhere with this board. The word cards seemed jarring and the other option was to add dialogue (adding the responsibility to record and animate the mouth to match the voice). Given the time budget, I opted to take another whack at another board.
Final Storyboard:
With this one, I felt confident that I was getting it to where it needed to be given the man hours I have budgeted and clarity in storytelling beats. This board has more drawings because I used it to work out the animatic.
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